C1Premium content · 5 min

Choosing the Best Client Onboarding Email

Colleagues compare two onboarding emails and revise one to sound clear, warm, and concise.

Activity topic: Comparing email tone and clarity

C1Premium content · 5 min

Choosing the Best Client Onboarding Email

Colleagues compare two onboarding emails and revise one to sound clear, warm, and concise.

Activity topic: Comparing email tone and clarity

Vocabulary in this activity

  • can you compare the two
  • gets to the point faster
  • I’m leaning toward the second
  • I’d use the second as the base
  • What would you change?
  • That’s smoother.

Excerpt

Nathan

Lucy, can you compare the two onboarding emails before I send one to the client?

Lucy

Sure. The first is warmer, but it buries the next step under too much background.

Nathan

And the second gets to the point faster, though it sounds a little abrupt.

Lucy

Exactly. It gives clearer instructions, whereas the first spends more time explaining our process.

Nathan

I’m leaning toward the second because the client asked for a quick start.

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What you'll practice

  • Sentence-by-sentence audio
  • 15 lines to say out loud, with feedback

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